Will different kind of ‘words of the same purpose’ have different outcome in a sentence?

Sometimes we’ll come across a sentence where it’s written in different fashion than the ones we used to know, and it could also be suspected that such combinations of unusual words have the same purpose with its more common version.

Examples:
(Common version)
1. She will return to her home to do her personal affairs. Before that she wants to sniff the smell of a flower so she stops by a florist. On the way to her home she feels so hungry because of her depression problems so she buys some sandwiches along with some soft breads from an old man that runs a vendor. The man speaks some French that beyond her understanding so she feels confused for a moment. She sees a mouse is running below her feet so she spontaneously screams out loud. Eventually, her strength is seeping away from her body, she feels weak for a while and pass out.

(Another version)
2. She shall go back to her home to tend own business. Before that she intents to smell the fragrance of a flower so she drops by a florist. On her journey to her home she feels so famished due to her stress issues so she purchases some sandwiches along with some smooth breads from an elderly man that operates a vendor. The man says some French that beyond her comprehension so she feels puzzled for a moment. She witnesses a rat is rushing under her feet so she automatically yells out loud. In the end, her power is ebbing away from her body, She feels fragile for a while and faint.

I must apologize if I made some mistakes in my examples, I’ve tried my best to compose what I meant to say. So, if we compare example 1 with 2, do you think it will make any differences? Will both examples still serve the same purpose?