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Is my college admissions essay good enough for admissions standards?
I just finished my college admissions essay and I am not sure that it is admissions worthy. What can I do to make it better? The prompt was to write about anything and I have written thus far:
Every incoming freshman in high school is advised to become involved in extra-curricular activities and the community because it is a crucial part of their high school career. I took this to heart and began trying activities that I was interested in and enjoyed and continued my involvement throughout the rest of my high school career.
During my freshman year I joined my high school’s marching band, choir, and drama club. Shortly after my freshman year, I realized that drama club was a great fit for me, while marching band and choir were not for me.
In my sophomore year, I continued my journey with the drama club by doing every production. In drama club, I worked backstage building the sets for the play. By the middle of my sophomore year I had become a “crew head.” As crew head, I managed a small amount of incoming freshman and some upper-classmen in building certain portions of the play’s set. At the end of my sophomore year I was inducted into International Thespian Society. This organization is for high school students who attend a school with a Thespian troupe and earn enough points.
Then, in my junior year one of my teachers introduced me to another club that I quickly became involved in. This club was Family, Career, and Community Leaders of America, or FCCLA. My junior year, I joined FCCLA and became involved in activities in the club including running for an officer position. Running for an official club position was a new thing for me because I was a shy girl and it was out of my comfort zone. However, running for an officer position was a success. I became the Vice President of Community Service where my job was to co-ordinate club community service projects. I organized club involvement at the local Soup Kitchen and in a local March of Dimes walk. At the end of my junior year, I ran and got the same position. However, the beginning of my senior year the president of FCCLA had to step down and the vice president stepped into the new role of President and asked me to be Vice President. I accepted and am now the Vice President of FCCLA.
As I continue my senior involvement in extra-curricular activities, I now see the impact that being involved has had in my life. I have stepped out of my shyness and have stepped into the role of a leader.