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Could you please correct my essay?

Asked by kiki__ (28 points ) December 2nd, 2013

Hello Could you please correct my essay. It is very important for my grade.

My friend Sabrina and I wanted to go to a party, which started at nine o’clock. Although we had to be at home around one a.m., we decided to stay longer. Three hours later we wanted to go home and we recognised that we have nobody, who could drive us home. Suddenly Michael, Sabrina’s friend, who was a little bit drunken, appeared and suggested to drive us and we agreed.

After around ten minutes by car Michael wasn’t feeling well. He said that he couldn’t see clearly. Abruptly Michael car clashed with another one. I didn’t know what happened after that, because I lost my consciousness.

When I woke up I was lying in the hospital. The doctor told me, that we had a car accident, but he promised me that my friends and I will be okay again soon. I broke one leg and one arm. I didn’t get injured very badly, but I couldn’t go to school for four weeks. I had to learn all the things, which my classmates learned at school, on my own. That was really exhausting! From this decision I learn that I will never drive home again with a drunken person!

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