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flo's avatar

Would you put the following statement another way, or correct the grammar etc.?

Asked by flo (13203points) 1 month ago

“Some of us fail an exam, some ace it , some in between.”
or
“Some of us fail an exam, some Ace it, and some somewhere in between”
Is one of them better and if not what’s a better of putting it?

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Tropical_Willie's avatar

Some of us fail an exam, some Ace it, and the rest are somewhere in between

janbb's avatar

Some of us fail an exam, some ace it (no capitalization), and the rest score somewhere in between.

Kardamom's avatar

Some of us fail an exam, and some of us ace it, and some of us fall somewhere in between.

kritiper's avatar

While some of us fail an exam, some of us ace it, and some of us fall in between.

Hawaii_Jake's avatar

As written in the first way, it’s a run-on sentence and can also be called a comma splice. It’s 3 independent clauses that need a conjunction to divide them. By adding “and,” the sentence becomes correct with the addition of a verb for the third clause.

Zaku's avatar

Some people fail an exam; others ace it; others do something in-between.

Hawaii_Jake's avatar

^That is technically correct but is also very ugly. ;-)

Zaku's avatar

Some people see beauty in a semi-colon. ;-)

SnipSnip's avatar

The verb needs adjustment. Some of us failed, some of us will fail, some of us will not fail, some of us may fail.

Yeahright's avatar

It is hard to tell without context. As it is, I agree with @SnipSnip that the problem is in the verb. Some of us have failed an exam, some have aced it, and some have been in between. Also, if it is not a particular exam, perhaps exams in plural sounds more general, as in Some of us fail exams, some ace them, and some fall in between. Again, context is everything.

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