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Anyone good with the english language help me with a paragraph?

Asked by lovelessness (659points) September 12th, 2013 from iPhone

I was writing a story of somewhat.. Its only two paragraphs long and I’d love to have feedback on it. Anyone willing to read and comment or suggest new things?

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