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Which of these poems is the best in your opinion, and how can these poems be improved?

Asked by MaisyS (734points) July 28th, 2019

So I posted some of my work before too. Here is some new work. I’d really appreciate your opinion on this, and any constructive advice is appreciated.

Poem number one:
I am sleight of hand
I am devilry, trickery
I am harsh and brazen
Alone, forsaken
I am the howl of the wind
The addiction in sin
The rot in your heart
And the death of a star
I am everything wrong
The world has to offer.

Poem number two:
My music is silent
it lays dormant, quiet.
My laughter is spent
and I wonder
how deeply is it possible to hate yourself?

A black rose among daffodils
Blood in the fields, marking my tomb
The grim reaper stalks
and I wonder
how deeply is it possible to feel alone?

The nine of diamonds
in a pack of cards
The elderberry
amongst the holly
How is it possible to be truly unlucky?

Poem number three:
I’ve existed in “pretend” since childhood
The only thing that’s kept me alive
Is imagining I’m not who I am

Recognize the break in me now
as you should have then
Stop worrying about my sins
Deal with yours

It’s too late to worry about
the drugs I’ve been on for years now
Getting high on insecurity and cynicism
Loneliness and criticism
It’s funny how my own
mentality and personality
can serve as my private prison.

Also which is your favourite of these poems? :)

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