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Please critique my poem?
Asked by ArizonaPancakes (147)
March 4th, 2009
I’ve read poems and I like to write. This is my first that I’ve let anyone see.Can someone critique it. be honest is it any good.
King Arizona
I moved and the sun moved with me,
I laid down to sleep and the sun settled behind my head,
I dreamt that the sun turned into the moon,
the stars wrapped around me, lifted me.
they stretched out my arms and
carried me to the cold quiet desert.
whispering in my ear; you are
the King of Arizona.
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