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Can someone please read/critique my poem?

Asked by aceofdiamonds (39points) April 12th, 2010

They lie to you
books, movies, music
about love at first sight
because lust gets in the way
touch kiss caress
then leave.
there IS no point
a dream:
fleeting
temporary
surreal
I can’t believe I’m doing this.
I can’t believe I’m doing this.
I. Don’t.
gasp
Do. This.
but i did.
and dreams don’t leave you numb
insensitive. confused. miserable.
and dreams
they fly away
as soon as you choose to remember them
your kiss:
fleeting
temporary
surreal
passionate
wild
painful..
teasing..
slow..
soft..
STOP.
You used me.
I used you.
We’re fucked.
Now what?

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