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[NSFW] How would you rewrite this scene's dialog to make it better?
Nurse: Do you like what you see?
Joe Marshall, the samurai cop: I love what I see.
Nurse: Would you like to touch what you see?
Joe Marshall, the samurai cop: Yes. Yes I would.
Nurse: Would you like to go out with me?
Joe Marshall, the samurai cop: Uh, yes I would.
Nurse: Would you like to fuck me?
Joe Marshall, the samurai cop: Bingo.
Nurse: Well then let’s see what you’ve got…
[investigates his bulge]
Nurse: Doesn’t interest me. Nothing there.
Joe Marshall, the samurai cop: Nothing there? Just exactly what would interest you, something the size of a jumbo jet?
Nurse: Have you been circumcised?
Joe Marshall, the samurai cop: Yeah I have, why?
Nurse: Your doctor must have cut a large portion off.
Joe Marshall, the samurai cop: No uh, he was a, he was a good doctor.
Nurse: Good doctors make mistakes too, that’s why they have insurance.
Joe Marshall, the samurai cop: [getting closer to her] Hey… don’t worry. I got enough. It’s big.
Nurse: I want bigger.
[walks away]
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