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Can you write haiku? Let's craft a few for Fluther. Let's see what you've got!

Asked by tonedef (3930points) November 26th, 2008

I searched and found this. You guys wrote some great pieces. Now it’s time for more!

Let your jelly flow! Count the beats with precious care. Nothing else allowed!

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dynamicduo's avatar

I love haikus, ever since we did them in English class way way back, them and tankas (5–7-5–7-7 syllables) have been permanently embedded in my brain. I can create a poem about pretty much any topic. Here’s one for Fluther:

Neverending Questions
I have a question,
but no friends know the answer.
I turn to Fluther.

Mind Opening
What’s your point of view?
I will share mine with you too!
Fluther opens minds.

Here’s a tanka dedicated to johnpowell.
Endless Activity
How do you do it?!?
No activity or q’s.
I’ve been here so long,
I cannot click fast enough
to tide the endless torrent.

I’ll brew up some more this afternoon :)

Harp's avatar

Wasting time at work
Talking to my Fluther friends
Hope I don’t get fired

tonedef's avatar

(Harp, I like your piece. “Fired” is usually 2, slur it and say “farred”)

Harp's avatar

I’m a Texan

gailcalled's avatar

Three times is enough.
Then it gets repetitive.
Haiku; rest in peace.

dalepetrie's avatar

Haikus inspired by my own musings on other recent threads:

Black Friday Blues

I’m skipping this years
Black Friday shopping orgy
Because the sales suck

An Ode to Cheech and Chong

I played Black Sabbath
At 78 speed once
And I saw God, man!

Why I have a car

I don’t ride a bike
Because I’m fat and lazy
And it gets too cold

Nirvana or Foo Fighters

Though I agree that
Foo Fighters are a great band,
Nirvana were gods.

bodyhead's avatar

My favorite one that’s been circulating around the internet for a long time is the following:

Haiku’s are easy,
But sometimes they don’t
make sense, Refrigerator.

eambos's avatar

I should be learning
But fluther’s pull is too strong
Girl in the frizzer.

KatawaGrey's avatar

Like a small green flea
Lightsaber at the ready
Yoda, my true love
My mom came up with the Yoda as flea idea

Furry, green and small
You are lovely, tennis ball
And now, my racket

My car is awesome.
Colonel Samantha Carter
is what I named her.

I am a huge nerd.
I watch sci-fi all the time
My mother watches more.

Cafe Atlantique
Alex is wearing cool shoes
This place is the best

Thanksgiving is soon
The English boys are coming
They speak with accents

@body: my aunt got me a shirt that says that last Christmas. It is my most popular shirt ever.

charliecompany34's avatar

WOW! i haven’t written haiku since like 5th grade! i can think of some people right now who would read this thread and still wouldn’t understand the pattern of this art form, but they can hook up electronics with their eyes closed.

augustlan's avatar

Here’s one I thought of while driving home in what was late afternoon, just a few short weeks prior.

Darkness at Earth’s edge
Bite after bite of the sun
Winter’s early night

dynamicduo's avatar

See, now THAT’S a real haiku in the truest sense of the word. augustian, your haiku made my heart go pitter patter for a second, I could hear it dramatically said in my brain! Haikus were originally mostly written about nature, and spoken in the Japanese language the minimalistic yet emotive form, as well as the beauty of seeing the characters drawn in traditional Japanese calligraphy style, it truly is a unique art form.

Schenectandy's avatar

Elements

Often is heard of
Nitrogen, Hydrogen, Tin
What of Osmium?

shockvalue's avatar

The first line has five.
Fluther is two syllables,
now I need three more

augustlan's avatar

Just noticed the tags! Good job : )

dalepetrie's avatar

The Haiku Haiku

First, five syllables
Second, seven syllables
Third, five syllables

dynamicduo's avatar

Oh my gosh… haiku haiku… you just blew my mind.

dalepetrie's avatar

hope no one was stoned when they read that

MacBean's avatar

No but a few of us felt a little bit like it after we read it!

augustlan's avatar

Turkey day was good.
Family. Fantastic food.
Pumpkin pie is win!

90s_kid's avatar

I like the 90s
The decade has many great songs
I like all of them

is that 5/7/5? im bad at counting syllables

eambos's avatar

8 in line 2

90s_kid's avatar

why are you always correcting me “eambos”? anyways…take away the word great then

bodyhead's avatar

90s kid, You asked to be corrected.

Eambos, I only count 7 in line two. Maybe it’s the way we pronounce the words down here in the south but it looks right to me.

eambos's avatar

Im sorry, didn’t mean to sound mean, just doing what you ask. I count the second line as The(1) Decade(2) Has(1) Many(2) Great(1) Songs(1).

bodyhead's avatar

Ah, I pronounce “many” as 1 syllable. Mystery solved. Stupid southern slang. I speak like an idiot.

shockvalue's avatar

uuh… I count 8 as well.

Out of curiosity, how is it possible to count “many” as one syllable? Could you spell that phonetically? (not being snarky, I’m genuinely curious!)

bodyhead's avatar

(mae) Yea. I know I’m retarded. That’s why I sound slightly more intelligent when I write.

KatawaGrey's avatar

@bodyhead: If you heard the discussions that went on in my suite about the pronunciation of the word “room” you wouldn;t feel so bad.

(two of the girls say “rum” and the rest of us say “room”)

90s_kid's avatar

bodyhead this is the fourth time eambos has corrected me about something…and I get 80s in school shockvalue so sotp being mean…i said take away the word great…here:

I like the 90s
The decade has many songs
I like all of them

there…not rocket science…

KatawaGrey's avatar

@90’s kid: Just out of curiosity, how old are you?

90s_kid's avatar

probably the youngest here….14 lol

90s_kid's avatar

but i found this site and it was AWESOME
i hve so many question and like answering
its my new hobby…sort of

KatawaGrey's avatar

Hahaha, I understand that feeling. I’ve been on since September and I’m still completely addicted. Welcome to the collective!

shockvalue's avatar

@90s Kid: I apologize if you were hurt by my comment, it wasn’t meant to make you feel bad. No hard feelings?

90s_kid's avatar

nonono its cool

augustlan's avatar

@90s: You’re not alone…there are several 14 year olds on the site, and a 13 year old, as well!

dalepetrie's avatar

The Obscene Haiku – here’s a haiku for when you’re really pissed and want to tell someone off…in haiku:

Fuck you, you asshole
Go to hell, motherfucker
Eat shit you dickweed

90s_kid's avatar

that was stupid

dalepetrie's avatar

My response to the last quip…in haiku form

What’s with your last quip?
It’s only four sylables!
What gives 90’s kid?

eambos's avatar

So are 90% of the other haikus in the world. At least this one has a point.

Haikus can make sense
But most of the time they don’t
Refridgerator

90s_kid's avatar

ok eambos my time to correct you ;D. it’s spelled: refrigerator

eambos's avatar

Then why the hell is the ab. Fridge?

90s_kid's avatar

i dont know but in second grade i got in trouble because i spelt fridge “frig” and the teacher said that was “innapropriate language for a second grader” and im like…oops

dalepetrie's avatar

The Refrigerator Haiku

90s kid is right
Refrigerator does not
contain any d’s

eambos's avatar

Dale’s good at haiku
I admit to my mistake
Why a “d” in Fridge?

dalepetrie's avatar

The why a ‘d’ in fridge quip haiku

I’ve no fucking clue
why they put a d in fridge
must be retarded.

eambos's avatar

Ahh, so very fun
Haiku offer nice release
Great to end the day.

90s_kid's avatar

maybe it’s spelt “frige”
but i dont think thats likely
I’ve never heard it

gailcalled's avatar

My Response to Dale’s Eighth Haiku

If we’re picking nits;
Note “syllable has two “ll”‘s.
We all make typos.

dalepetrie's avatar

A thank you to gailcalled for pointing out my error

Oh shit, I fucked up
I must have fried my brain when
I was jerking off

shockvalue's avatar

oh that’s just nasty
must every conversation
end in hanky pank?

KatawaGrey's avatar

I’m just enjoying
This haiku conversation
While I watch Angel

dalepetrie's avatar

Why is that nasty?
I cleaned of my computer
after I was done.

eambos's avatar

Eww, that’s disgusting
Way too much detail for me
Nineteen Eighty Four

dalepetrie's avatar

I was just kidding….
The goo is still on my screen!
But, seriously….

dalepetrie's avatar

Maybe the next time
someone will ask us to write
limericks instead

augustlan's avatar

Oh, no. Limericks.
I can not wait for that one.
Too much sex involved!

dalepetrie's avatar

Is there such a thing
as too much sex, augustlan?
I don’t think there is!

augustlan's avatar

Dale is just too quick
I can not compete with him
I bow to him, now

dalepetrie's avatar

Yes, bow before me
For I am the number one
haiku mack daddy

augustlan's avatar

You make me laugh so
Oh number one haiku man
We shall all hail Dale

dalepetrie's avatar

What a great honor
just to have my name mentioned
in someone’s haiku

90s_kid's avatar

Why are you special?
What have you done for us all?
I’m not fully sure

eambos's avatar

Master of Haiku
A great poet and worthsmith
That is what dale is

dalepetrie's avatar

You’re making me blush
with all these great compliments
(well, not 90’s kid)

90s_kid's avatar

I will say you’re good
I can’t do any better!
I’m bad at haikus

eambos's avatar

That one wasn’t bad
You had the right syllables
Good Job, 90s kid

90s_kid's avatar

It is very fun
Talking in the cool manner
I will all the time

Thank you Eambos
Even though you still make sure
All things are correct

I am talking ‘bout
In my own hand-made haikus
but its for better

dalepetrie's avatar

You’re doing just fine
keep up the excellent work
rock on 90s kid.

augustlan's avatar

I have been thinking
in haiku form all day long
I may have to scream!

dalepetrie's avatar

I did that last night
when I went to the corner
to get some more milk

augustlan's avatar

As long as we don’t
talk to others in haiku
we should be okay

MacBean's avatar

The best holiday
is the seventh of May, for
it’s World Haiku Day!

augustlan's avatar

I miss this question. :(

shockvalue's avatar

this question is gone
but not forgot. let us now
reclaim what we sought.

augustlan's avatar

Lurve to shockvalue
for reviving this question.
I feel happy now. : )

eambos's avatar

I want to join in,
But there is much work to do.
Fluther distracts me.

augustlan's avatar

As it has always
been, so shall it ever be.
Fluther steals our time.

Harp's avatar

Does that make Fluther
A machine for converting
Work time into lurve?

eambos's avatar

I guess that would be.
Why am I not working now?
Excuse poor grammar.

KatawaGrey's avatar

At nine forty-five
Tomorrow I have a test.
I should study now…

shockvalue's avatar

The snow is falling
and my classes were canceled.
Now it is lurve time!

eambos's avatar

My paper is done.
I can rejoice. Oh yes!
Now I will relax.

KatawaGrey's avatar

I have been watching
How I Met Your Mother and
It is a great show

KatawaGrey's avatar

I still have much work
I am jealous of Eambos
Who has finished up

Harp's avatar

Good God, am I glad
that my school days are long gone.
I don’t envy you.

KatawaGrey's avatar

Indeed you should not
I still have to take my test
Even though I’m sick

Harp's avatar

Look on the bright side:
Maybe the germs on your test
will snuff your teacher.

eambos's avatar

Harp snuffing teachers?
Please make sure you don’t get caught.
Jail’s not a good place…

KatawaGrey's avatar

Ah, but my sickness
Is extremely powerful
And could kill killers

Harp's avatar

OK, I take it back.
Guess I have some unresolved
Issues with teachers.

Harp's avatar

But KatawaGrey,
Good luck on the friggin’ test.
Hope you feel better.

KatawaGrey's avatar

Many many thanks
I need a whole lot of luck
Test will kick my ass…

augustlan's avatar

Kick the test’s ass back
Or perhaps the teacher’s ass
Either one will do.

gailcalled's avatar

Another issue
Is: which is more elegant.
“Tests suck” or “tests blow”?

MacBean's avatar

Kick no teacher’s ass!
They don’t deserve the abuse!
…Snuffleupagus.

eambos's avatar

“Snuffleupagus”
Lurve for that in a haiku
Pancakes in frizzers

Harp's avatar

I can almost see
The inventor of haikus
Rolling in his grave.

eambos's avatar

Lol, I say to thee
Haikus should be in Chinese
We English are wrong

Harp's avatar

Um, actually
I believe they’re Japanese.
Not that it matters

eambos's avatar

Knew it was Asian
I just had the wrong country
I should research more

KatawaGrey's avatar

History was bad
Music could have been heaps worse
The tests kicked my ass

Japan and China
Getting them confused is bad
It pisses them off

Harp's avatar

Sorry to hear that.
So, “How I met your Mother”
Wasn’t on the test?

KatawaGrey's avatar

I wish it had been
I would have gotten an A
I have watched so much

augustlan's avatar

Haiku makes my day
It’s nice to be reminded
Thank you robmandu

dalepetrie's avatar

Ode to George Carlin

Can’t say 7 words
shit, piss, fuck, cunt, cocksucker
motherfucker, tits

maggiemaye's avatar

serendipity
wandering lost instead
silly maze

VS's avatar

I have been lurking
Fluther has the greatest peeps
You guys rock this shit!

Harp's avatar

Yeah, you got that right!
Here, have some negative lurve.
Happy April Fool’s!

augustlan's avatar

Fluffy clouds, sunshine
Warm breezes are in the air
May is beautiful

augustlan's avatar

February cold
How I am longing for May ^^
Enough of this shit

Never ending snow
Thirty inches last week, gah!
More to come today

Vincent_Lloyd's avatar

@90s_kid: You’re not the youngest XD I’m 13 haha right here I think this is the 13 year old augustlan was talking about. But here’s my haiku:
My world goes around.
Moon Glimmers and the sun shines
It’s you that makes it.
(like I said I dedicate it to Amber so yeah XD thanks)

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